The Calf's Horrible Good Day (First Draft)

Term 2 Week 2

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened?
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

First Draft

The Calf's Horrible Good Day

It’s a beautiful day outside in the half Savannah half Desert in Africa, the sun was out of the clouds, in fact the clouds aren't here at all!  It was October the 17Th, so me and my herd were trying to find an entrance to the river bank so we could have a drink. My herd was walking down the river bank then suddenly the herd leader stopped, first I didn't know why but then when I looked the herd leader went to the river bank entrance and then everyone rushed to the entrance so they could have a drink. I got stepped on and then my dad came to me and made the other buffalo get out of the way for me so I could get a drink. I had a big drink and then I was really full, well of course I am, I'm a Calf after all. I really hope I grow to be a big strong buffalo like my dad so I can protect the herd from danger, like from lions, tigers, leopards and cheetahs, maybe not cheetahs because they’re too fast.

My herd and I were walking down the river bank again to find leaves or grass because we love the taste of delicious grass and leaves, but instead we saw lions coming to eat us so we were running for our lives! I was really slow and the lions caught up to me with their fast speed adaptation added to their legs so they can grab their prey, I hear the lions coming towards my herd and I. They gripped onto me with their furious blood lurking teeth to crush me, I felt like a chew toy. The lions pulled me to the side of the river bank away from my family so my family couldn't rescue me! I really hope my family will save me so I can get away from the furious hollow boned lions.

Then I thought I could smell a crocodile, I saw a crocodile! the lions and the crocodile are pulling me apart like a chew toy to eat me! I felt like I was bleeding everywhere, the lions pulled me harshly and the crocodile let go so the lions took me back onto land. Please save me dad, I really hope I will survive.  I saw my herd coming back to rescue me, my dad sprints towards the lions and then he kicks one of the lions before he grabs me from them. I saw my dad kick a lion into the river bank, my herd kicked the lions out of the space that we need, after that we had a humongous drink and then the lions sprinted away from us because we beat them up, we found a new home.

It was tiring like the sun was making me sweat as if I was going to die!  I felt as if my bones were breaking and I was going to die! It was atrocious like it was the end of my herd and I.  I felt that my energy was drained enough for me to stop moving.  I felt like nothing existed.  My family came back to save me, I felt like it was a relief. But now I have won and it is my time to stand up for myself and win every time they come back to attack.